Tassen Spellbinder

Hello, KnightlyAngel, Tassen Spellbinder here to review your poems! "The soil you dig reveals no trace, Of the buried, vanished, handsome face." -- I really think that the comma after ...

Tassen Spellbinder here with feedback on your poetry. Lauren, I think they sound just fine. I would like to nitpick at a few things, however. "I sink deeper into the ...

Hello, Crescent. Tassen Spellbinder here to review your poem. "Goblins dancing in the air, singing songs full of despair." -- If you could find a way to make that not ...

Hello, hidden. (I can see you. Sorry, couldn't resist.) Anyway, Tassen Spellbinder here to review your poem. I'm going to do this line by line, so here we go. "Lighting," ...

Hello, TenYo. Tassen Spellbinder here to review your poem. The first thing I noticed was in the third stanza. "The bombs will be sent into the sky for the worlds ...

'ello, Jagged. Tassen Spellbinder here to nit-pick at your poem. And what an interesting poem it is. First, I think you might want to point out what the The Kübler-Ross ...

Hello, Bailey Holcomb. Tassen Spellbinder here to review your poem. First, can I just point out that your avatar is epic? Totally unrelated, but it's epic. Moving on, then. The ...

Hello! Tassen Spellbinder here to nit-pick at your poem! Actually, there's not a lot I have to nit-pick about. "but I regret all my life mistakes" -- I would make ...

An interesting poem. A few things jump out at me, however. "melt somewhere in the distance spread like butter over stardust only to fall right through and tumble across the ...

Let me start by saying that I really liked this, and without further ado, jump right in to the editing. "I'd rather walk a straight path, That will take me ...

Welcome to YWS, and best of luck in your romantic pursuits!

I enjoyed this work. The first thing that struck me was your conspicuous lack of punctuation , but as you reference infinity so many times, it contributes nicely to a ...

I too like this poem. Really, I only have one suggestion for you. I would examine the second half of your poem. I noticed little or no punctuation in it, ...

Click goes the sound of the bolt, preparing death to move. I carefully, oh so carefully put the butt of the gun against my shoulder, noticing every little detail, making ...

I think that this belongs in Experimental, if there is such a thing- I honestly don't remember. As far as edit's go: "maybe on purpose?" Capitalize the maybe. "Ack!! Me ...